An Analysis of A Diss Track

While opening Schoology this morning, I happened upon a notification. Nathen Kovacs had responded to the Blog Post #5 Discussion. I was immediately intrigued at the title, "Some Epic Rap Diss Lyrics (And On My Sachin Response). It was at this moment when I knew I had to write an analysis on Nate's fire bars on Sachin. I myself, am a Sachin hater. I have known him for over four years, but I felt each one of the diss tracks he dropped was weak. But I have hope for Nate. Below, I will take apart some of the bars.

"Flexin’ and I gonna pull up

All with my dogs and you just a pup"

This is a bar if I have ever seen one. I love this imagery of Sachin the little pup facing off against Nate and his squad of dogs. A suggestion I would make is to permeate this dog imagery throughout the album, put in something like “You go sniffing around for tough bars and sounds, Yet what you come up with is fit for the pound”

Last time I checked you couldn’t push up 

You a lil boy, I’m a grown up 

Rhyming up three times Nate….this is kind of weak….

I didn’t know that you would conspire

And still your song was anything but fire

I think this bar has the potential to pop off, perhaps if you could some more words that rhyme with conspire? It’s an interesting rhyme especially since it’s three syllables, so rhyming it sounds a lot more pleasing than one syllable rhymes.

We were truck boys I thought we were brothers

Riding around, respecting our mothers

This is indeed true, you and Sachin do respect your mothers, as you should.

But then you thought that you were tougher

And woke up a beast right from his slumber

This would be a perfect place to continue that dog imagery from before, perhaps saying something like “And woke up like a poodle right from his slumber” I think calling Sachin a beast is kind of a compliment here, so bring it back to woof woof time.

I’m really really sorry that I gave you this defeat

But really it was you who started all of this beef 

You think you is special but you're just deceived

And I had to prove it to you right on this beat 

If your cinematographer (Sachin) plays this right and you match the beat, I could envision this becoming crazy with the swell of the beat going up and then some crazy visuals would look so awesome. 

I’m griefing your toilet from here on out (minecraft)

And to think that you rap just for clout

Please put in some creeper explosions or the minecraft hurt sound

I’m lyrically destroying your pitchy rap

And now the audience is starting to clap (BARS)

Bars.

With a reflection of Nate’s diss track, I really think it has the capacity to overshadow Sachin’s bars, which was stuff like “When I come to your house, I make sure to come late!” Weak. Nate’s bars on the other hand, are built differently, a deviation from the norm, if you will. Nate I am so excited to see what happens on your diss track. I hope that you can put in some elements like imagery, enjambment, perhaps even a little bit of inverted syntax to truly cement yourself in history over Sachin.